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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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Traffic congestion has been one of the biggest
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 which a large number of cities are facing nowadays.
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 essay with examine the main causes of traffic congestion and some possible solutions to
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problem
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, the major cause of
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problem
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 is limited and inconvenient public transports.
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, travelling by a
car
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 is more flexible and convenient to people’s
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
, weekly household shopping,
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. It would be easier for people to catty things to their living place by a
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instead
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 of a public transport
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 as a bus which might currently contain a lot of people. Because of
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, it leads people to become a
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 owner. The additional cause of
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 trouble is
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 about there is no control in
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 commission. Everyone can purchase a
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 as long as he has enough revenue for it. If a major city has approximately a million people, each owns a
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, there would be a million cars in that city.
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 becomes traffic jam. Some possible solutions to
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problem
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 are encouraging people to use more public transports along with improving them, and increasing all types of
car
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 expenditures. By encouraging people to aware of the effects that would occur after too much
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 using,
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 as PM2.5, together with improving public transports to be more convenient and modern, more and more people would turn attention to travel by public transports.
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, increasing all types of
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 expenditures,
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 tax, would lead more people to consider if they literally need a
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, people will use public transports unquestioningly. In conclusion, limited and inconvenient public transports and no control in
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 commission lead many large cities to
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the traffic problem
traffic problems
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,
this
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 can be tackled by encouraging people to use public transports and improving them as well as increasing all types of
car
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 expenditures.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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