Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Due to technological advancement, it has helped to make the travelling and to socially connected with people easier. I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in my essay

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In todays

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an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)

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, people can commute from one city to another with the help of private and public vehicles availability. Earlier, to commute from one place to another was a tedious or impossible task. With the modernization of private vehicles and public commutation facilities

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it is quick and fast to travel

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hometown

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is in Bharuch,

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however my

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however, my

working place is 70 Kms away from my

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. With the help of private vehicle

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refers to the speaker or writer

can reach

form

a giver or sender

from

hometown

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to my office in an hour. Nowadays, several

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publicly

opting for a job away from the countryside

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the reasons are due to good salary pay, for better growth as well as for the fruitful future of their loved ones.

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with the betterment of technology

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children fled away from their parents

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due to which the rate of loneliness and depression increased among senior citizen. In one of the article from US University researched that

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75% of the children are staying away from

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of them or themselves

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hometown

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home town

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use

of social media

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meeting

meetings

in person among people have reduced. To summarize,

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down saying

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down, saying

that working and living in any corner of the world is possible due to increase in the number of private vehicles as well as

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of staying away from the family they can be in touch with each other with the help of innovation of technology called mobile, telephone

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advantages

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the advantages

outweigh the disadvantages.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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278 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Communication technology
Remote working
Economic growth
Cultural exchange
Urban congestion
Social inequalities
Transient populations
Globally homogeneous
Work-life separation
Connectivity
Erosion of local cultures

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Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think museums and art galleries should show works of art and history from their own country rather than from diff erent parts of the world. Do you agree or disagree ?

Some people say cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money- making attractions aimed at tourists. Others say this is the only way to save such traditions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

Now a alot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourge them to learn vocational skill ( like plumbers and electricity). Do you agree or disagree.?

Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.