Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Technology
is becoming part of our day to day
life
. It carries huge impact on our daily routines in work as well as personal
life
. The amount of hours that we spend hand in hand with
technology
is staggering. And out of that,
large percentage
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a large percentage
of time is consumed by social media platforms. Social
aggeragators
a person who collects things
aggregators
like Facebook, twitter, Instagram, Whatsapp,
etc
studies intended to provide general knowledge and intellectual skills (rather than occupational or professional skills)
arts
keep us in constant connection of our friends and families.
This
have
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has
a dual impact on our
life both
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life, both
positive and negative socially. As humanity
itself we
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itself, we
have become more social. The appreciation of our achievements is
fullfilling
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fulfilled
fulfilling
, even though virtually conveyed. Sharing our joys and sorrows is what makes us
social
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socially
, and
technology
had enabled us to do so with
somone
a human being
someone
even hundreds of miles away. We are able to organize social events, political gatherings, community meetings in a more structured and easy manner. It has
inturn
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in turn
increased the amount of occasions when one can meet others.
Techonological
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Technological
mediums
such
as chats, photos and videos have made the sharing experience more vivid. Opening doors to our private lives have made us more socially accountable as well.
However we
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However, we
cannot ignore the downfalls of
technology
on society. Our human psychological nature is badly affected. Teenagers are more socially isolated. Staying in-homes more often than meeting with people and involve in sports activities. Avoiding community connections involving direct interface with people.
Finally I
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Finally, I
would say,
technology
still have more good than bad to offer. And it is up to
us how shall
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us, how shall
we receive the gifts of
technology
. The ever
evolving innovative
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evolving, innovative
ways of
technology
to connect us is
profoundly going to
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going to profoundly
improve our social
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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