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many people believe that every individual is responsible for his /her own healthy lifestyle. others believe that governments should take care of it. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lifestyle #governments #care
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventative care
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health policies
  • healthcare accessibility
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • nutritional information
  • government intervention
  • health education programs
  • public health campaigns
  • personal accountability
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