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Many students have to study subjects which they do not like. Some people think this is a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Today's generation will overburden with a lot of subjects which some public think are fully wastage of time and energy. In
this
 essay I shall be providing my views supporting the idea of keeping a few subjects which will help the pupil to concentrate and enjoy their adolescence. In
this
 competitive world, it is necessary for the offspring to be master of all fields, but Younglings are overburdened with a plethora of books. They hardly go out for outdoor games. Nowadays children are in the house, spending 12 to 13 hours with the academy homework, which make them lethargic and inactive. They are unable to concentrate on one particular subject in which they have a keen interest. Nowadays, more cases of depression and suicide are coming up. As parents and teachers pressurize them with lots of institute activities. Let's say the kids are interested in the arts, but due to many other subjects they cannot enjoy doing drawings, which at the end decrease the overall score of the child.
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 should have asked pupils about their interested subjects and allocate them as per their choice.
This
 will help him to progress well in life. They can start thinking for their career from the tender-age. To summarize my whole idea, I would say it is better to have lesser subjects of pupil's interest rather than overburdening them with all unnecessary topics at the institution.
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