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In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In today’s society, we are able to shop, work and keep in contact with people through the Internet and live without any direct connection with the others. From my perspective of view, these changes are negative development to all humankind. On one hand, the Internet does help people communicate better. Exchanging information has never been easier
as a result
 of rapid changes of the Internet. With the devices that have Internet access, despite our time and location, we are all connected. Just with a touch on the screen, and people’s demand for
conversation
 is met.
In addition
, online
conversation
 is not time-consuming, which is becoming an important aspect in people’s hectic pace of life. co
nnection v
Suggestion
Connection
ia the Internet only takes us milliseconds connect whereas traditional forms of
conversation
 took us many days and weeks.
Moreover
, we human is
also
 be
ingalso b
Suggestion
being also
e able to go shopping online while working or staying at home.
On the other hand
, we are on the brink of being socially isolated because of our overuse of the Internet. As it is possible and effortless for us to meet online without having to talk face-to-face, the need of
d
Suggestion
for
irect connection between people dramatically decreased. In the past, when we wanted to buy something, we went to the nearby shops and asked the shop assistants for some advices on the product, which unintentionally gave people a chance to talk. No
wsaday,
goods are all bought online and done through electronic transaction, which means
conversation
 without words. In the long run,
this
 may lead to a growing number of youngsters spending their lonely lives in a room
instead
 of going outside and making contacts. In conclusion, in spite of all the benefits that the Internet brings about, it is definitely becoming a negative development for us human.
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