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Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days listening to the elders has been a debatable issue. While some believe that the young generation ought to listen to their elderly, I agree with those who think that they should do on their own as it gives them a precious
lesson
 to be learned. On the one hand, it is thought by some that teenagers should listen to their parents or grandparents.
This
 is because having well experienced in their
life
 and they often learned many valuable lessons from their mistakes.
Also
, in their
life
, they have seen many ups and downs which gave them a good
lesson
.
For instance
, many parents give advice to their children not to play with those children who are arrogant, selfish or involved in bad influence, as they knew from their experience that
such
 children are mean and would allow their children to be like them.
However
, even though
such
 advice given by parents is utmost important, I think that some decisions should be left over to their children,
such
 as choosing a
career
 and
life
 partner, that gives me a valid reason not to agree with
this
 view.
On the other hand
, it is argued by others that youngsters should do on their own and challenge their elderly. As they would learn an important
lesson
 in their
life
 from their own mistake that will be with them forever, and probably, the same mistake would not be repeated again in the future.
For example
, in the recent article by BBC News in March 2020 revealed that 55% of teenagers choose their
career
 on its own and found to be successful at living in technology era they knew what is the best for their
career
.
Likewise
, if they had compelled by their parents to choose the
career
 or education, they would have not been able to successfully and learned any
lesson
 on their own.
Therefore
, learning from own mistakes gives them to go ahead in their
life
 and do not repeat it, which gives me a reason to agree with
this
 opinion. In conclusion,
although
 some argue that following or listening to our parents or grandparents is the best way, I agree with those who believe that millennials should challenge their elderly and do on their own that gives an important
lesson
 to be learned if we get wrong.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Role models
  • Respect for tradition
  • Wisdom
  • Societal stability
  • Continuity
  • Critical thinking
  • Innovation
  • Societal progress
  • Adaptability
  • Questioning authority
  • Seeking identity
  • Generational gap
  • Value systems
  • Adherence
  • Challenging norms
  • Cultural evolution
  • Empathy
  • Guidance
  • Rebellion
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