The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Since the beginning of

21st century

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the 21st century

more folks have started to explore attractions and remarkable sights all around the world. An opinion exists that the most convenient way of foreign culture acquaintance is through

special company

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a special company

with relevant specialization. I completely disagree with the above-mentioned statement due to the reasons described below in my essay.

Firstly

agencies prepare

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agencies, prepares

agencies prepares

product with strict agenda and timetable with no opportunity to re-arrange and modify upon tourist interest.

Excursions

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Excursion

duration and rest periods are commonly created rigorously that leave low agility for a person to experience surrounding atmosphere. The same applies to eating out as dinning location and dishes are often dictated by organizers who might choose unattractive venues.

For example

, in 2018 my mother who is fond of oil painting was compelled to visit castles and churches in Paris through organized trip.

Thus

, inability to fully pursue our heart’s desire during the long-awaited journey might result in blurred impression and frustration.

Secondly

, the wages of receiving party are included

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the final price and are obviously much higher than going rate that lead to less lucrative conditions for tourist. All transport services imply increased cost for a driver, petrol, parking and a potential ticket for

overspeed

spend more than available of (a budget)

overspend

that a customer cannot regulate. Cities who experience fluctuation of demand driven by

seasonality

periods manage to harmonize budget shortage through packaged visitors.

For example

, my sister calculated that anniversary tour to London in 2019 would cost 20% less for exact same amenities if were executed independently.

Hence

budget

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the budget

oriented individuals might experience less

value

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the value

purchased

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purchasing

services formed by a

third

party operator as mandatory costs are incorporated

in to

expresses motion to a point on, or within, something

into

margins. Taking into account all mentioned above, I’m convinced that the activities arranged by tour guides result to be less fascination as they usually are not financially viable and leave no room for improvisation

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

308 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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