some people think a sense of competition in children should be encouraged,others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.What is your opinion?

#people #sense #competition #children #co-operate #adults

From my perspective, there are some considerable benefits if children are taught to co-operate.

First

of all, co-operate teaches children to become more kind

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helpful and devoted towards others.It will create a situation of mutual benefit to achieve maximum advantage if we teach them to help others and work together.

Secondly

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one of the important qualifications that employers expect from their applicants is team-work skill. And it is common knowledge that people who learn how to collaborate since childhood are likely to have the capability of getting on well with other members in the team.In conclusion, it cannot be denied that competition is a part of our life for development.

However

, it needs to be encouraged and controlled to follow the fair direction.

Additionally

, co-operation is immensely necessary for children to become useful adults.

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Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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some people think a sense of competition in children should be encouraged,others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.What is your opinion?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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