some people think a sense of competition in children should be encouraged,others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.What is your opinion?

From my perspective, there are some considerable benefits if children are taught to co-operate.
First
of all, co-operate teaches children to become more kind
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Accept space
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helpful and devoted towards others.It will create a situation of mutual benefit to achieve maximum advantage if we teach them to help others and work together.
Secondly
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Accept space
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one of the important qualifications that employers expect from their applicants is team-work skill. And it is common knowledge that people who learn how to collaborate since childhood are likely to have the capability of getting on well with other members in the team.In conclusion, it cannot be denied that competition is a part of our life for development.
However
, it needs to be encouraged and controlled to follow the fair direction.
Additionally
, co-operation is immensely necessary for children to become useful adults.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • compete
  • cooperate
  • useful
  • adults
  • skills
  • motivation
  • drive
  • resilience
  • failure
  • workplace
  • empathy
  • social skills
  • reduce
  • stress
  • pressure
  • balanced
  • approach
  • ideal
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