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Some people believe that children's Leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree?

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According to some people, every
activity
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 that children pursue in
there
of them or themselves
their
 free
time
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 should have some educational value. They believe that activities that do not teach anything are useless.I fully agree with
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 view.
when
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When
 children are taught with
education
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educational
 purposes in their free
time
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, they learn with more enthusiasm and effortlessly.
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, In
recent survey
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a recent survey
, it was reported that children who play games that serves educational purposes, have
more intellectual level
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a more intellectual level
 as compared to other children and learn more with pleasure. It
prove
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proves
has proven
is proven
is proving
 that learning can be a fun
activity
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 for children.
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, leisure
time
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 activities that
serves
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serve
 educational elements can
also
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 be best of
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child's
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the child's time
a child's time
time
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.
This
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 ensures that they do not waste
time
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 in activities that are
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
 and useless.
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, children playing sports in their free
time
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 can
taught
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teach
 them benefits of healthy living.Another benefit of
educational leisure
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educational, leisure
activity
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 is that it involves parents to teach
there
of them or themselves
their
 kids, that enables them to strength parent
child
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 relationship. In conclusion, keeping in mind the various
benefit
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benefits
 of
educational leisure
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educational, leisure
activity
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 that includes purposely using
child
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's
time
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 and strengthening parent-
child
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 relationship, it should be used more in daily activities.
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