One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages?

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Medical techniques are more and more improved. Most people can restore their illness with improved medical
care
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when they are sick. So
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these days
, people are not worried about death than
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the past
. Obviously, there are the advantages and disadvantages of
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advance
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. Some people argue that the disadvantages are much bigger than the advantages are. They think that
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medical
improment
the occurrence of a change for the worse
impairment
improvement
can cause meaningless increased
life
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.
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Also they
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Also, they
argue that
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situation makes confusions about
death meaning
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death, meaning
and the society where there are many old people than young people.
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Actually, according
to a lot of articles, these problems are very serious problems.
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Therefore we
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Therefore, we
have to take an action to solve them. But there are some people who argue that the advantages of medical
advance
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outweigh the disadvantages. They think that to improve medical
care
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is important because sick people have to get the
care
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. And they tell that
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advance
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brings longer
life
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. So people can choose if they die or live more.
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instance in
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instance, in
the past time, people with
illness dead
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illness, dead
because that contemporary medical techniques could not solve
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problem.
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However now
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However, now
, the current medical techniques can solve most of medical problems. So people do not need to be worried about death. And people can choice if they get the
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or not. In the world, the
life
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is important. So
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there are many disadvantages through medical improvement, we
can not
can not
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ignore the fact that
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advance
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can help
life
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. So I think that the advantages of
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improvement are bigger than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • medical advancements
  • workforce
  • wisdom
  • overpopulation
  • resource strain
  • aging population
  • healthcare costs
  • multigenerational
  • lifelong learning
  • retirement planning
  • pension systems
  • sustainable living
  • generational divide
  • personal growth
  • long-term goals
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