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In schools and universities, girls tend to choose arts while boys like science. What are the reasons for this trend and do you think this tendency should be changed?

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It seems to be a common tendency that the
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 subject of male students is science while arts subjects are often chosen by female students. Obviously, there are various causes of
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, boys are likely to be more intelligent and better at logical thought than girls.
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, girls tend to be more patient, more careful and more skilful, which made them suitable for subjects requiring thoroughness. Another reason is that many parents want their children to follow who they would like their offspring to become in the future.
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, students just pick their subjects according to their parents' wishes. In my view, the decision to pursue art or science should be made by children. It would be better for students to opt for the subjects that they have an interest in regardless of their gender. If children are forced to take a course that they do not have any passion for, they might drop out of the course due to boredom and stress.
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, students have the right to choose what they want to learn and
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 decision should be respected. Parents and teachers should only be the person who
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 their children useful advice. In conclusion, there are a variety of factors leading to the subject preference of boys and girls and from my perspective, they should be given freedom of choice what subject they would like to pursue in the future.
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