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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (You should write at least 150 words.)

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. (You should write at least 150 words.)
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The graph below illustrates the total number of
goods
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 transported from England between 1974 to 2002 using four different modes of
transport
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.
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, the
transport
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 mode of the pipeline increased, rail remained constant and despite some fluctuations, water increased drastically,
road
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and road
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 increased significantly over the period.
According to
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 the graph, the pipeline started its transportation, at about 3
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 in 1974 and
then
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, there was a sharp increase.
However
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, from 1982 to 1990
pipeline
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the pipeline
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 remained constant. But after that, there was a sharp decrease and again without
change
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a change
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 in the
last
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 8 years. On the flip side, the other
transport
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 mode of rail initiated their journey
40
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of 40
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million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 and though some fluctuations over the period
but
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apply
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remained unchanged.
Moreover
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, the mode of water
transport
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 started just below 40
million
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tonnes
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,
then
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 a sharp increase in the year
of
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apply
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1978 to 1982 and finished their quantities
just
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at just
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 over 60
million
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tonnes
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. The highest transportation occurred by road over the period began at approximately 70
million
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tonnes
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 and
then
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 it increased and increased over time
and
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apply
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at
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to
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 95
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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goods
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 transportation.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, transport, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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