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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Some people argued that a severe punishment towards criminals will decrease the crime rate.
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, others believe that the authority has to develop and improve measures to reduce and ovoid crimes. In my opinion, I think that both are crucial to live in a safer place.
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 of all, in some cases the sentences are too short and the time in prison is not enough to obtain a successful prisoner's rehabilitation. That means that the judge should apply severe punishments and do not reduce a
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, criminals have to receive an effective rehabilitation in prison, including psychological assistance to improve their lives and really change their habits and thoughts by the time that they obtain their freedom.
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, there are plenty of measures to consider to decrease crime rates.
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 of all, the government should take care of vulnerable families, offering them an economic and social help.
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, authorities must pay attention that everybody has access to mandatory education, as well as an opportunity to obtain a job.
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, it can be possible applying social plans and promoting
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 organizations that can help these people, teaching them essential skills to be prepared to obtain a job in the near future. In conclusion, longer sentences are necessary to prevent future crimes.
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, it is crucial that the society gives an opportunity to vulnerable families who do not know how to improve their financial situation. In my opinion, I believe that the government should improve laws about social assistance, especially for people in a poverty situation.
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