In many countries, students do not want to study science subjects at university. Why is this happening? What will be the consequences of this for society?

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science
subjects
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not
have
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stimulant
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a stimulant
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for students to study
this
part of lessons in university;
thus
, in most nations will be
being
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economic problems in society. The first
reveals
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cause for not studying
science
subject is
shortage
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tendency. Owing
to
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students will not have a basic security job
for
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in
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the future. Take
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for instance
, a recent
graduated
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in
this
field
fail
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to find their vocation.
Then
, it is a stronger reason to do, not focus on these
subjects
.
Furthermore
, that able to remarked is difficult to quite understand
science
subjects
. It is,
however
, necessary
to
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most part of skills,
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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and some doing on routine days.
Then
, if they waste the time
for
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learning and choosing another subject, the myriad of students are getting the best job and finding a more comfortable situation in their societies. There is ample
of
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evidence that disregarded
science
subjects
influenced
economic
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the economic
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development
a
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of a
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society. Not only does it bring economic stagnation, but it
also
depends on the other
countries
.
For example
, chemistry
subjects
can help in making medicines and it reduces the cost of it in each country.
Therefore
, not
possess
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notice about
this
subject does have a negative point
for
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on
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countries
and it has a bad effect because it's becoming less youth versatile workforce related to
this
job. Despite avoiding creating special opportunities in
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the economic
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economic
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it likely has few economic losses.
To conclude
this
essay, is the motivational element that stopped
to continue
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to take in
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from taking
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science
subjects
in several
countries
.
In addition
, in most
of
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countries
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the countries
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, these
relevant
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are relevant
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to
serious
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the serious
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consequence
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consequences
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of
economy
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the economy
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in a society. #writing_correction38
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