The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The graph below provides information about the bonus of the society aged 65 and over during the 1940 to 2020 period in 3 different territories.
Overall
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it is clear that
the lowest ratio of elderly people Linking Words
were
represented by Japan.
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on the
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USA
. In 1940 the proportion of elderly people in the USA went through many considerable fluctuations during the period from 1940 until 2040 where it estimated a gradual growth, Correct article usage
the USA
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decrease
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decreased
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2040 the territory with the lowest percentages. Some fluctuations occurred in Sweden as well, Change preposition
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ancient
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increase
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second
country with the highest chunk of those people. Linking Words
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beginning
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the
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percent
of these individuals.
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the
2040 years, Correct article usage
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occurred, making Japan the country with the highest feeReplace the word
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