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COMPLETING UNIVERSITY IS THOUGHT BY SOMEONE TO BE THE BEST WAY TO GET A GOOD JOB. ON THE OTHER HAND, OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT GETTING EXPERIENCE AND DEVELOPING SOFT SKILLS IS MORE IMPORTANT. DISCUSS BOTH SIDES AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Many
youngers
a scheming person; someone who schemes to gain an advantage
anglers
infers
 are told that without a proper degree is very hard to get a normal job and impossible to attend certain positions. But there are many possible ways to evolve the necessary soft skills for a job. I think that it is better to attend the university when we are still young as it is
also
 a perfect environment for personal development and in the older age we wouldn’t be motivated to do it.
First
, behind every object, both consumable and materials, there is a job that offers working place and salary, but they require different skills and approaches.
For example
, some roles like professors, medics, engineers and many others require a specific degree to be approached. The amount of knowledge
that is
 necessary can be built only after several years of studying and not less important but not enough is the
life
experience
.
On the other hand
, a businessman requires more
life
experience
 than knowledge to be able to see the opportunity, deal with people and make the right move at the right time.
However
, it is not true that a student is not doing work and
life
 experiences as well as developing soft skills. Very often students work during their degrees to evolve some practical skills and start a working career
instead
 of just studying, which is not enough for every profession. Being able to study and start some kind of light work at the same time is more appreciated by many employers. To sum up, both studying and getting personal
experience
Suggestion
experiences
 are the right ways to achieve own objectives and earn good jobs. Anyway, both ways can't be complete without each other because personal
life
 is made of knowledge and
experience
.
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