The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#results #survey #people #four #tourist #attraction #britain #summarise #information #features #comparisons

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

The provided chart depicts the

survey's

Change noun form

survey

show examples

result

Fix the agreement mistake

results

show examples

visitors

Use synonyms

Change preposition

show examples

four different British tourist attraction types in the year 1999.

Overall

Linking Words

, it can be seen that museums and galleries

as well as

Linking Words

Theme

Use synonyms

Parks

Use synonyms

have a major proportion of the total

visitors

Use synonyms

moreover

Linking Words

, out of the five

Theme

Use synonyms

Parks

Use synonyms

, Blackpool Pleasure Beach is the one that people visited the most. The Museums And Galleries had the

second

Linking Words

largest proportion of entire

visitors

Use synonyms

that

Correct pronoun usage

which

show examples

was 37%.

Whereas

Linking Words

, the largest number of people visited

Theme

Use synonyms

Parks

Use synonyms

, which accounted to be 38% of the total

visitors

Use synonyms

.The remaining small percentage of tourists chose to visit the historic houses and monuments

as well as

Linking Words

wildlife

parks

Use synonyms

and zoos

Change preposition

apply

show examples

16% and 9% respectively. The Blackpool Pleasure Beach had almost half, 47% of the total

visitors

Use synonyms

who visited

Theme

Use synonyms

parks

Use synonyms

, followed by Alton Towers and Pleasureland in Southport That had 17% and 16%

Theme

Use synonyms

Park

visitors

Use synonyms

respectively.The Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland of Windsor shared 10% of them each.

Submitted by shumak1144 on Thu May 14 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".

▼

Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.

▼

Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, theme, parks with synonyms.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

▼

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

163 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

5.5
band
The average age for individuals to give birth is increasing. Some people think that it will have negative impact on family and country. What is your opinion about this?
Nowadays, there is a noticeable increase in the number of births. There is an increase in the average age of citizens who give birth. Which makes people think there is a dark side to family and nation. This essay will discuss this issue and argue why it is a challenging to be a parent in older age.
<4
band
Many Offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishments. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle these problems
Today the crime is increasing dramatically. Unfortunately a number of individuals are occurring crime after their punishment. This is a serious problem but steps can be taken to tackle the problem.
4
band
Overweight Children In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often considered that a few individuals reckon that in many nations, teenagers are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some population believe that the government should play a vital role for solving this issue. Thus, I dissent from the notion which further leads to a logical conlcusion.
<4
band
Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many people think that the responsibility for the combat climate is higher for developed countries than for developing countries, while others think that both type of countries have equal responsibility. I believe that developed and developing countries should make same actions to protect the environment.
6.5
band
Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?
The discourse of experiments on animals has brought so many responses with some individuals saying this is bad, while, others stressed this is the right method. From my point of view, this is a justifiable method due to its accessibility and its role in mitigating the problem in society. Meanwhile, there are not many options.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The average age for individuals to give birth is increasing. Some people think that it will have negative impact on family and country. What is your opinion about this?

Many Offenders commit more crimes after serving the first punishments. Why is this happening and what measures can be taken to tackle these problems

Overweight Children In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should be responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?