The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided chart depicts the
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result
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of
visitors
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four different British tourist attraction types in the year 1999.
Overall
, it can be seen that museums and galleries
as well as
Theme
Parks
have a major proportion of the total
visitors
.
moreover
, out of the five
Theme
Parks
, Blackpool Pleasure Beach is the one that people visited the most. The Museums And Galleries had the
second
largest proportion of entire
visitors
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was 37%.
Whereas
, the largest number of people visited
Theme
Parks
, which accounted to be 38% of the total
visitors
.The remaining small percentage of tourists chose to visit the historic houses and monuments
as well as
wildlife
parks
and zoos
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16% and 9% respectively. The Blackpool Pleasure Beach had almost half, 47% of the total
visitors
who visited
Theme
parks
, followed by Alton Towers and Pleasureland in Southport That had 17% and 16%
Theme
Park
visitors
respectively.The Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland of Windsor shared 10% of them each.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, theme, parks with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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