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News about problems and emergencies is harmful to individuals and society. Do you agree or disagree?

#news #emergencies #individuals #society
Society
 is brought under threat when people come to know about problems and emergencies. I disagree
to
Suggestion
with
 the statement. The two main reasons are it helps to create awareness among individuals and it makes the
society
 responsible as a whole. News is always criticized as being harmful and spreading terror and crimes in the
society
. But, the main reason for
such
 a conclusion may be the result of weak journalism and poor reporting of any particular event. If an event provokes or is deemed responsible for causing uproar and crime, it may be the insensitive handling of the incident by the media-persons. If we put aside
such
 cases, I feel that reporting of problems and
emergency
 situations can never be dangerous for the
society
. In fact,
such
 news helps the general public to be aware and proactively protect oneself against
such
 a situation. Be it
crime
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a crime
 or vulnerability of
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 sort.
For example
, we often come upon the news of cheaters siphoning money out of the bank accounts of gullible customers. The modus operandi of these digital criminals is taking the customer into confidence and asking the OTP number received by the customer on their phone. But once these stories started doing rounds in
news
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the news
, people now have become quite aware of
such
 a situation and have started rejecting
such
 calls outright. So, it is evident that
this
 news had helped
people more
Suggestion
more people
.
Secondly
, news about any type of
emergency whether
Accept comma addition
emergency, whether
 in the locality or anywhere in the globe, causes the
society
 to act in a responsible way and helps the
society
 as a whole. Situations of
emergency
 like the recent spread of pandemic CORONA virus. In
this
 situation, the news channels are continuously updating the count of
spread
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the spread
 of Corona Virus in all countries. We have come to know about the rights and wrongs of various developed nations.
Government
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The government
 has
thus
 implemented various measures for prevention of the virus among countrymen.
Also
, the
dos
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do's
DOS
 and
don’ts
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Don’ts
 that a person needs to follow are
also
 being broadcasted simultaneously for the common public to follow. Had there not been any reporting of
this
emergency
, all the nations would have suffered equally and for nations like India, where there is a high density of population in a very small area,
this
 disease would have killed at an exponential rate.
Thus
 we see that the positive effects of news clearly outweighs the negative sides.
Hence
, we can comfortably conclude that news reporting of emergencies and problems do not cause us as much harm as the lack of media would.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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