As an international student in Sweden, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank. Write a letter to your bank. In your letter: introduce yourself and ask for a loan say why you need the money tell how you intend to pay back the money

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Dear Sir, I am writing

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letter in regards to applying for a student loan as my saving and momentum account is associated with your Scotia bank. My name is Peter

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and having an Account number 437-9987 in the downtown branch with no bad credits and clean record. Once you go through my account, you will be able to see international transactions of money transfer from

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country every month since 2 years back, which didn't show up in the current month. Needless to say, being a student it's really hard to manage expenses in a foreign country with

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work allowance. As you know, In the winter and bad weather conditions

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companies gradually decrease their workforce and only keep permanent employees in a slow period of work. Meanwhile, Money transfer from parents is the only fund to survive and pay expenses

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as rent, utilities and transit

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. I assume you fathom at the contemporary time and issue the loan amount of $1500 with sufficient time to pay back. I am committed to

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the money as soon as I receive funds from my home and error get sorted so, I can stay loyal and avoid bankruptcy in any scenario. Please feel free to call me at 578790 if you need any detail and possible negotiation on the interest rate of the total loan amount so I can pay all in 3 months. Yours faithfully peter

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