Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays,

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presents plenty of violent content, generating a huge discussion in the society. Some people think that it does not affect audience acts, while others believe that it can generate detrimental effects and bad habits on their public. In my opinion, children must stop watching

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due to

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shows sensitive images, and adults must avoid watching violent events as well.

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of all, we are living in a violent society, and it is too difficult to face

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situation.

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, children are exposed to watch several detrimental acts on

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shows, like fights or violent discussions.

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, it generates bad habits on youth people, who are vulnerable and start imitating these offences.

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, parents should be aware of the kinds of video games that their offspring are playing, controlling them. There are plenty games related to fights and crimes, being a negative example to follow for children.

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, adults should decrease their

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consumption as well. Regrettably, the rate of domestic violence and crimes on the street

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day after day.

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is responsible, in part, due to some shows encouraged these kinds of events. There are a giant number of violence crimes in the news, giving ideas to the whole population to commit criminal acts and do not respect the rights of the rest of the people who they are living with.

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, some programs show criminals as idols and victims who do not deserve a sentence or they explain step by step how they avoid to be in prison. In conclusion,

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and video games must be used with caution due to they can be dangerous for the whole society.

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, some children and adults start feeling allowed to commit crimes which they watched on their screens, and feel a sense of empathy with criminals.

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