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Many people think that children should obey their parents, while others debate that teens should decide independently.
Although
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obeying parents
is
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are
more advantageous for
child’s behavior
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the child’s behaviour
child’s behaviour
a child’s behaviour
and
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life, I believe that thinking independently will enlarge child’s world outlook and deal with facing challenges by themselves.
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, thinking independently makes children to develop their ideas toughly and solving problems without anybody’s support. Deciding freely and without pressure of parents helps children to develop their plans for the
future
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by using own imagination and get prepared for
upcoming challenges
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the upcoming challenges
by working hard and creating new methods of developing self-concept of
future
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career. A good example for
this
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can be the celebrated football players, who decided by themselves and achieving more victories by thinking independently. If children will not use their own imagination and not make plans for
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future
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the future
, they can fall into the trouble easily or will face bankruptcy of business due to not having self-concept.
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, obeying parents and not having own decisions for
future
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existing will make children to face many problems and having a lack of ideas. Children who are under the pressure of parents tend to be less active and they are forced to do what their parents order,
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they can get more experience by working with
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people.
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, children who are going to be doctors are encouraged to study history and geography by their parents, so by not having self-interest for
this
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profession they will fail their works because of not having interest and ideas about
this
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election of parents. If children will do activities without their own concept they
are tend
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tend
to waste their time by failing. In conclusion, children should have independence of thinking to aim something great and getting accustomed
for
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to
working without anybody’s help. In my opinion children should do both obey their parents and work independently in order to accomplish each profession or operation successfully.
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