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It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more aptitude. To what extent do you agree ot disagree?

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It is aimless for students who don't have any skills
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 painting and drawing to pursue Art classes at
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, they should focus more on their practical courses, which they find more interesting to learn.
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 suggestion because it helps them to choose their desired
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 develops curiosity to learn
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 for pupils, who
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 focus more on art subjects like drawing and painting, which they find boring to study, it ultimately leads them to failure in academics, but students focus more on
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 they like,

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relevant specific examples
Provide more specific examples to support your argument. For instance, mention specific practical subjects such as technology, sciences, or vocational training that students might prefer over Art classes.
logical structure
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and flows logically to the next point. Improve transitions between points to enhance the essay’s overall coherence.
clear comprehensive ideas
The essay clearly attempts to engage with the topic and provides a stance on the issue.
supported main points
Logical reasoning is presented in support of the argument, though it could be more developed.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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