The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present.

The map depicts how the rural area of Ryemouth has expanded over two and half decades from 1995 till date. It is noticeable that in

north-west

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the north-west

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direction sports facilities got developed. Apart from that, commercial

oppurtunities

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opportunities

also

got flourished.

However

, a fishing port

gotn

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got

demolished from the south. In 1995,farmland and forest

exissted

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existed

in the northeast area of the village.

Moreover

, on both

the

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apply

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sides of the road, there were

row wise

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row-wise

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housing facilities

as well as

seperate

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separate

plot having 4 buildings in

thenorthwest

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the northwest

area.

In addition

, there were hotels and

cafe

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cafes

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the

south-east

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southeast

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direction and not only the shops but

also

fish

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the fish

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market has already been established

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the southwest side,

along with

the fishing port in the

center

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centre

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of the south.

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present, the farmland and the forest park got merged and is

replaaced

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replaced

with a golf court and a couple of tennis court in the northeast part.

Whereas

, in the northwest, housing amenities got increased

with

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stretching the pathway leading to two newly constructed houses. Coming to the southwest of the village, a new park got

builed

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build

built

with no changes to the hotel and cafe.

Apart from

this

, the shops and the fish market got transformed into restaurants and

appartments

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apartments

respectively. Whilst, the fishing port to the south of

the south of

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the village has been demolished.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 8 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 8 times.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

222 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Urban development
Infrastructure
Residential area
Commercial district
Public amenities
Greenery
Renovation
Expansion
Demolition
Construction
Accessibility
Public transport
Urbanization
Evolution
Gentrification

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