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Today more and more students are deciding to move to another country to further their studies Do u think this is a good idea

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The migration of students from their native land to other countries
have become
Suggestion
has become
 popular in recent times. In my opinion, I totally agree with
students decision
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the students' decision
students' decision
 to travel overseas for
education
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educational
 enhancement, as it avails them the opportunity to widen their horizons.
Firstly
, the decision by students to journey overseas for education improvement is
applauable
not capable of or suitable for being played or played on
unplayable
playable
applicable
 as it gives
such
 student edge over his colleagues in his native land.
This
 is because he is
opportuned
of great significance or value
important
 to learn in a new environment with challenges, methods and ideas different from what he/ she experienced in his/ her
country
.
For instance
, a student who majors in chemistry from a developing
country
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
 to a developed
country
 for
enhancement
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an enhancement
 in his study field.
Such
 student will return to his
country
 better with advanced knowledge.
Furthermore
,
this
 will equally give students room for self development as well as career growth.
This
 is so because
such
 students will meet diverse people in their field who will assist.
For example
, students who mingle with people who are ahead/ seniors in school will find someone to meet their needs when situations arise. Conclusively, deciding to study outside one's
country
 is a good decision as it gives varying opportunities to students.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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