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The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
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The provided bar chart illustrates both men and women with different kinds of employment
status
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statuses
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, which had enjoyed their spare
time
 between 1998 to 1999.
Overall
, Unemployed and Retired
people
 of both sexes have the most relished
time
 that they spent.
Despite
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, the employed female and
male
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males
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 have the least rate of enjoyment compared to those who don't work at all. Whether or not,
people
 have different
status
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statuses
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 of employment, they will enjoy their free
time
 in some circumstances. As we can see
that
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, the
people
, who don't have jobs or
retired
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, are satisfied in their free
time
 at almost the same percentages, a male has over 80
percent
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per cent
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, a female has just under 80
percent
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, respectively.
On the other hand
, those who are
full
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full-time
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time
 employed were at a small level of satisfaction compared to the above percentages. Male was over 40
percent
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per cent
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 and females were under 40
percent
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per cent
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. If we turn to, housewives and part-
time
 women employees, the percentages of enjoyment were slightly greater than employed
people
. It is rated at 50
percent
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 and 40
percent
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, people, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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