the chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

the chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011
The chart illustrates the
propotion
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proportion
of residential houses classified into
possesed
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possessed
and leased
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in England and Wales over the period between 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, it is evident that there
was
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oposite
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opposite
trends in both types of
accommodation
. Owning
accommodation
saw an upward trend and vice versa, renting
accommodation
saw a downward trend. From 1918 to 1939,
housholds
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households
in
possesed
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possessed
accommodation
saw an increase from 23
percent
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to 32
percent
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,
then
it remained the same until 1953.
Similarly
, renting
accommodation
was
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fell from 78
percent
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and
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off at 69
percent
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over 14 years.
While
owning houses was rise to over 40
percent
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in 1961, renting
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was
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decreased by 10
percent
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and reached
at
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the same figures for the
propotion
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proportion
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in both types with 50
percent
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after 10 years. From 1981 to 2001, there
steadly
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steadily
steady
increase from 60
percent
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to nearly 70
percent
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in owned shelters and
decrease
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from 40
percent
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to just over 30
percent
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in another one. In the
next
10 years, the figures were changed in two types,
while
owning
accommodation
was
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decreased to 64
percent
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, the percentage of renting
house
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houses
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saw
an
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slight increase to 36
percent
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.
Although
there were different trends, residential house in rented
accommodation
was the highest option over the beginning of the period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

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  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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