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Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#women #childcare #men #focus #children #life
Mothers are having incredible power of giving birth to young one. Undoubtedly, they are more caring towards their infant. Because, there is a natural connection between the two. But, it does not mean that they have to sacrifice their future for
this
. Let's discuss in the
next
 paragraphs. In the world of modernization, women are working with each and every sector, as well as, nourishing their kid. The biggest symbol of
this
, Dr. Kiran M Shaw, she is running a huge company named as Biocon in Bengaluru, India. On the other side, she is
also
 a good mother. As, she is a great lesson for every lady, who is forced to skip their carrier only because of the development of her infant. According to the statistical data, 40% ladies, pushes by their in-laws family to discontinue their job, for the sake of their baby.
Secondly
, Women are procreated and the power to recreate the nation. They started nurture the baby is in the form of foetus till young one.
For example
, Marykom, she started her boxing carrier after giving birth to the child and parallel look after her kids
also
. Perhaps, her husband helped her in
this
 whole story and
this
 will be a powerful work-life balance. Another symbol, Rani Lakshami Bai, she fought with the enemy emperors for making her kingdom safe from them. At that time, she was a mother of a 3 years child and she was the queen of the kingdom. By
this
 notion, I want to say that, if a mother feel her infant safe and secure by getting help from her partner,
then
 she will never be distracted in her work life. So, if a woman gets a little help by the family,
then
 it will be a great start for the new trend for the girl's future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • nurturing
  • empathy
  • sensitivity
  • maternal instinct
  • paternal involvement
  • child's development
  • work-life balance
  • gender equality
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