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In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there is a competition among the students to study more and more.
This
 way, there’s a difficult situation facing not enough spare
time
. In
this
 article, I will discuss the reason and try to draw some conclusion.
Firstly
, families put force on the students to study hard. Parent
expect
Suggestion
expects
 them not to do anything except going to the books. If they request for having leisure
time
, they will be accused of wasting their valuable
time
 by their parents. To solve
this
 issue parents should have logical expectations, which do not put their kids under pressure. Another reason is that the Youngers
themselves
people in general
they
 believe that there is a direct connection between their future and the university they will be accepted in.
it
Suggestion
It
 is a common believe among them that if they graduate
form
a giver or sender
from
 a well-known university, they might be more satisfied with their job in the future. The more they attempt, the more they will be
assure
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assured
 in their lives.
As a result
by
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of
from
, being studious, they want to guarantee their occupation.
This
 problem could be addressed by introducing some other jobs not requiring academic studies.
This
 would encourage students
to
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in
 other fields to work. To sum up,
although
 it is clear that there are some reasons that study hard and put
force
Suggestion
a force
 on themselves, it is possible to tackle with them. Having less expectation
by
Suggestion
of
 the parents and making more job opportunities by the government must take the lead in dealing with these problems,
otherwise
kids
Suggestion
the kids
 will suffer from not having enough
time
.
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