In some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, there is a competition among the students to study more and more.

This

way, there’s a difficult situation facing not enough spare

time

. In

this

article, I will discuss the reason and try to draw some conclusion.

Firstly

, families put force on the students to study hard. Parent

expect

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expects

them not to do anything except going to the books. If they request for having leisure

time

, they will be accused of wasting their valuable

time

by their parents. To solve

this

issue parents should have logical expectations, which do not put their kids under pressure. Another reason is that the Youngers

themselves

people in general

they

believe that there is a direct connection between their future and the university they will be accepted in.

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is a common believe among them that if they graduate

form

a giver or sender

from

a well-known university, they might be more satisfied with their job in the future. The more they attempt, the more they will be

assure

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assured

in their lives.

As a result

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from

, being studious, they want to guarantee their occupation.

This

problem could be addressed by introducing some other jobs not requiring academic studies.

This

would encourage students

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other fields to work. To sum up,

although

it is clear that there are some reasons that study hard and put

force

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a force

on themselves, it is possible to tackle with them. Having less expectation

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the parents and making more job opportunities by the government must take the lead in dealing with these problems,

otherwise

kids

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the kids

will suffer from not having enough

time

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modern education systems
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