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Increasing car usage in many large global cities has caused a number of problems. Some cities have proposed banning private vehicles from the city centre. To what extent do you agree?

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In the recent era, the human beings prefer to
use
 own wheelers for
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
, due to
drastic effects
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the drastic effects
 of
this
 trend in fewer areas the higher authorities banned the private vehicles. I think
this
 action has many and various improved results. In my piece of writing, I shall shed light on the reasons of my agreement. More importantly, by dwindling the
number
 of the personal cars on the roads automatically kick out the pollution problems
.
Accept space
.
 To illustrate, if the quantity of the private vehicles is minimal on the streets,
then
 it leads to less smoke emission and hit the increase degree of the harmful gases. Apart from
this
, the sharp upward demand limit of the fuels is
also
 a major an economic problem for the government, with the swear up
use
 of the public transport and cut the rate of the running
number
 of the own vehicles lead to get optimum usage from limited sources of fuel.
Furthermore
, in the current time period
,
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,
 the
number
 of the daily travellers increases due to work or tourism purposes. By implementing hard and strict rules against the
frequently
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frequent
use
 of the private bikes or other wheelers leads to dim the light of traffic congestion in the
developed
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developer
 places.
For example
, if the counting of the public vehicles is more in service,
then
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than
 the traffic jams always show its light shadow on the roads.
Moreover
, the increasing
the
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number
number
 of the accidents is the pop up problem of the big cities, and perhaps, these
mishappening
 can be erased with the help of the less
use
 of the private cars. I agree that the administration efforts to decline the figure of the transport personal machines to avoid the future problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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