Some people argue that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Bad
time
hit mostly everybody in today’s life. Some Fix the agreement mistake
times
people
think that we should just accept it while
others, believes
that only giving an effective solution can truly make things better. Both of these views will be examined before a conclusion is reached.
Change the verb form
believe
To begin
with, people
nowadays are facing unsatisfactory situations like losing interest in their workplace, they apparently opt for giving
up that job. Change preposition
to give
This
happens because when the employee repeatedly asks his employer to increase their salary or to promote but the boss abuses, that
the organisation does not need your services anymore. Correct word choice
apply
In other words
, the company dismisses the individual from his role. Hence
, they become upset and depressed that nothing could
be done now.
Wrong verb form
can
However
, critics believe that finding ways to overcome disappointing conditions is considered to be more effective. Even though attempt
does not guarantee success, Correct article usage
an attempt
but
it makes Correct word choice
apply
people
feel like they have tried and would not regret rather
than doing nothing. Correct pronoun usage
it rather
Additionally
, they can also
learn from mistakes and get experience, individuals are being forced to think and get out of their comfort zones. For example
, Thomas Edison ultimately managed to invent the light bulb after
more than Change preposition
apply
1000
timesCorrect your spelling
1,000
trying
. If he had given up just after one or two first attempts, the world we live Verb problem
apply
today
would not exist. Change preposition
in today
Moreover
, succeeding in difficult tasks after making great efforts gives people
's sense of accomplishment. As a result
, it will become a huge motivation for the next generation.
To sum up
, both have its
own benefits. Correct pronoun usage
their
Nevertheless
, I tend to believe that striving to change the situation not only does it help people
explore their abilities, but it also
enhances problem solving
skills.Add a hyphen
problem-solving
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