Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree?

It is thought among a few that wealthy countries have greater responsibilities towards less developed nations in the form of developing their
health
care
system as well as education. I fully agree with these concepts through experts exchange programs in treatment section and providing scholarship for tertiary level of education. Experts exchange programs can be forwarded by creating mutual opportunities for
health
care
professionals to visit each
other working
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other, working
facilities
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facility
and working
on
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in
those facilities for a time being to exchange skills. To carry forward programs like these financially advanced counties should provide logistics to persons who have strong motivation to work in
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
countries. They can
also
arrange extra job facilities in their host countries whole are entitled with volunteer experiences.
On the other hand
,
health
workers from poor economic states should get offer to visit advance facilities of
health
care
in strong economic conditions countries. Scholarship opportunities should gain the most priority for inter countries educational support programs. In
this
process, meritorious students, who are
potential asset
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potential assets
for economically challenging counties as they would be future leader of those countries, owing to come back to develop their mother land.
In contrast
, they can show their creativity in a suitable and competitive environment that might be only available to the healthy GDP owners. A bilateral trust and cooperation would emerge if
this
kind of healthy relationship persists among totally opposite economic zone countries. In conclusion, Counties with opposite economic profiles should build a bridge by
assist
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assisting
in
health
care
and educational promotion which will not only gear the economically marginalize
countries
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countries'
country's
development but
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development, but
economically solvent countries will get output in the name of fame and discovery of talented individuals
also
. The world is a global village now so no opportunity should be restricted by the bracket of
economy
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the economy
.
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