These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Today numerous
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Today, numerous
people go abroad with their family members in
order
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to find a job. Some hold the opinion that
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movement brings advantages to children while others argue that it is burdensome to adapt to
new environment
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new environments
the new environment
a new environment
. Personally, I agree with the latter view that children come across a lot of difficulties when they go to foreign countries. Supporters of
former view
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the former view
claim that children are more likely to be able to integrate.
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, when children spend time among the people who are familiar to them, it is difficult to meet new persons. But they are subject to talk and contact strangers in
order
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to ask something or get help in other countries.
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, in the case that, children go to shopping without
parents they
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parents, they
have to maintain contact with retailers which leads to conversations. They,
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, have a big chance of gaining a higher level of educational qualifications. To illustrate, after
finish
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finishing
university most students prefer to continue their education abroad in
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to improve
themselves whereas
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themselves, whereas
to live overseas gives
this
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opportunity to children from childhood.
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, for these people going abroad has a lot of advantages.
However
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, I share the view of those who believe that
cons
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the cons
of moving abroad outweigh pros.
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and foremost, the key factor that makes children upset is culture shock. Generally speaking, children face new cultures, customs and traditions are unknown
for
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to
them and to assimilate all these varieties, as well as new peoples belonging to different nationalities are extremely difficult for children.
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, to learn new
language
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takes a lot of time and until managing to speak in that
language
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children
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child
suffer from talking to others which leads to being introvert and unsociable in the future.
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, they can’t go outside without parents in
order
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to buy something which is necessary for them. Even to play with other children is
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impossible providing that they learn their mother
language
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.
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, they feel isolated and solitary. Before learning
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language
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the language
and culture of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country to move there
thus
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is arduous. To sum up, it can be advantageous migrate to foreign countries, but considering culture shock and foreign
language
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that children have no information about, people must think about their children before moving,
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