The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The supplied bar graph compares the rate of male and female students with the highest grades in 1960 and 2000, in terms of science, arts, maths,
languages
and
humanities
. In the 60s, males got
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in science and math - between 30 and 40
percent
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,
while
females got high marks in several subjects ,
such
as art and
humanities
with 30-35
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and
languages
with 45
percent
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. The smallest
digestibility
of male students
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art - less than 10
percent
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,
whereas
the lowest
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of
digestibility
of female students
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math accounting for approximately 5
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. With
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, males had the highest
digestibility
of got marks were
humanities
- more than 40
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,
however
,
digestibility
of math was less than in the 1960s and amounted to only 15
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. Other subjects ,
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such
as
languages
, art and science had almost the same percentage of
digestibility
. Yet, women received lower grades
this
year than in the 1960s. The percentage of grades in
languages
was 30
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, in
humanities
and arts around 20
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,
while
mastering mathematics
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still accounted for 5
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, humanities, percent, digestibility with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • top grades
  • achievement
  • gender disparity
  • educational trends
  • academic performance
  • comparison
  • decade
  • educational policy
  • societal expectations
  • improvement
  • educational attainment
  • graduates
  • academic excellence
  • statistics
  • educational landscape
  • benchmark
  • parity
  • gender roles
  • historical data
  • performance indicators
  • educational improvements
  • longitudinal study
  • scholastic achievement
  • gender gap
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