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Smacking children is the best form of dicipline. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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Many argue that
most effective method
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the most effective method
 of controlling the youngsters is by physically hitting them.
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this
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 logic has some
weightage but
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vintage, but
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, in my view, there are other numerous ways to regulate the teenagers beyond spanking.
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 essay will examine the consequences of hitting kids before a conclusion is inferred. On the one hand, adolescents have very innocent and sensitive minds that absorb everything which is happening in their daily life. Striking the kids physically can lead to disastrous effects on their innocent brains.
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,
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, can have adverse psychological effects which will hamper the growth of the teenagers.
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, a recent article published in the UK famous newspaper, The Telegraph, revealed that merely less than 35% of
young children population
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the young child population
young child population
 are spared from physical abuse and rest all are having multiple psychiatric issues due to spanking.
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,
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, physical punishment can have negative ramifications in kids academic performance, which, resultantly, lead to failure in
child's performance
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the child's performance
a child's performance
 at academic levels. Personally,
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I
 am
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witness
 to observe a
kids
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kid's
kid
 failing career due to beaten physically by his parents.
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, the convincing argument, those
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supports
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 theory, have that fear of being punished will boost child energy to perform well in life. In conclusion, though punching of kids for their betterment
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has
 numerous positive
effects but
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effects, but
 it's far less impact than dealing politely and gently.
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