Some people argue that in the modern world it is necessary to be able to speak at least two foreign languages. Others say that it is better to know one foreign language very well than to have poor command of two foreign languages. What is your opinion?

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In most cases you have heard about the benefits of learning another

language

– good for your degree, good for your travels, good for your career – some people seem to think that being multilingual isn’t all that important anymore. We’re here to remind you that not only is it important, it may very well be necessary. It’s true that there are more and more people learning and speaking

English

these days. In fact,

English

is,

according to

some measures, the most widely spoken

language

in the world, the de facto lingua franca. Approximately 1.5 billion people around the world speak

English

, whether as their native tongue or as a foreign

language

, and

this

number is still growing. I have been learning

English

for five years consciously for myself. And I want to say

English

like my second

language

which I can use for free. Now I don’t consider

English

as some kind of achievement.

This

is my life. Because I have a lot of foreign friends who I only speak

English

with. I traveled a lot and I don’t know how I would have been without

English

.I can speak German.

This

is my third

language

. I’m very glad. I learn German to study and to know. After all,

language

opens up for you just a huge number of doors and opportunities. Thanks to the fact that I’m learning German, I had the experience of

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abroad school where I spent all

last

summer. And I can say for sure that these were the best days of my life. In conclusion,

that

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in the

21th

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century

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it is no longer cool to know one foreign

language

, it's fascinating to know five or more.

Language

is not something complicated, rather it is what you need to spend your time on. Thanks to my parents who support me and

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this

opportunity. I’m sixteen and I know three languages I can speak fluently . I can do more, I know! I learn Italian and Polish. Because

this

is my life and I want to invest in it to the fullest.

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The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively frame the discussion on the importance of learning multiple languages. Consider refining the thesis statement to clearly outline your stance on the topic.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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