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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people can not expect to enjoy a job and that having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have various positions regarding whether
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 security has the lower level of importance compared to
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 satisfaction or people can not feel elated with their
career
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 when they have temporary
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. While
job
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 satisfaction can sometimes be beneficial, I generally believe that having a steady
job
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 plays a crucial rule in conveying a sense of delight during the working hours. There are two principal reasons why some people are of the opinion that
career
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 contentment is situated on a higher stage in comparison with utilizing
secure
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security
 measures during the working hours. If staff had
satisfaction sentiment
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satisfaction, sentiment
 about their
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,
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their enthusiasm would be intensified and ultimately can lead to a higher productivity due to realising from any discontentment relating to
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. Take do not
receiving
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receive
 a substantial salary enforce them to seek for part time
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 as an example; They leave from
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 for working with another organization, so the overall performance of the company will be diminished.
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, despite the manifold advertisement about the obeying the security while working, the
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 security has the minor portion of
interferying
intrusive in a meddling or offensive manner
interfering
interferon
 criteria in
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 standards.
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, if employees face physical injuries during
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, other workers can fill his position without any concern. Having a sense cheer,
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,
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 during the working hours can be mentioned as the most important criteria. One the flip side, others argue that the sense of joy cannot be instilled into the people when they do not have a steady
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. The temporary
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 can be intended to have an ambiguous
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 prospect. Since employee abruptly can be confronted with unfair dismissal by provisional
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 due to economic recession, the possibility of the financial difficulties will be raised in their family life. In my idea, break down family can be one of the drawbacks of a temporary
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 because they
can not
can not
cannot
 afford the fundamental requirements of their family members including food and water provision. It is true that both of these perspectives are common through people,
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, it seems to me that having a constant vocational life is more important than other criteria.
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