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In most developed countries shopping is not only about buying the goods our need, it is also perceived as entertainment. Is it a positive or negative development?

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Introduction
In most economically advantaged nations, not only is shopping symbolic
Body paragraph 1
of
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Of
 one's inherent desire to satisfy his basic needs, but it can be a form of entertainment.
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 essay revolves around the argument that
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 'phenomenon is detrimental because it is the backbone of consumerism and creates unnecessary waste. These two reasons will be presented in the 'following paragraphs.
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Excessive shopping can accelerate consumerism.
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 which is a typical dystopian setting where money is valued more than love, gratitude and other fundamental sentiments paints a disastrous picture of humanity. People 'under the effect of consumer culture would be blindfolded by material possessions and despise all without considerable wealth. Humanitarian values which make humans unique would exist no more.
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 the current society has not yet reached that level of severity, shopping without restraint can hasten the process and surely, that day of doom and gloom will come.
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 trend can
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 be condemned for a catastrophic amount of waste which perpetuates existing environmental issues. An additional bag or a new dress would not truly entertain anyone because extrinsic joy is not permanent and requires one to undertake an endless search for more through buying items.
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 of giving joy to their owners,
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, these products will 'only wreak havoc on the nature, and when they are inappropriately disposed of, they can exacerbate the pressure on overloaded landfills. When landfills 'are full, trash will be buried or thrown
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into
 the sea. Land pollution will an inevitable predicament when most consumer goods do not
biodegrade
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Accept space
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 nor will be situation be any better deep down in the oceans.
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In conclusion, when people do not only shop for necessities, but
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 for 'entertainment, consumerism and an increasing amount of waste will arise,
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thereby rendering
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 trend very disadvantageous for the public's interest. Lest
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 problem go beyond one's control, actions should be taken
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in
 haste and care.

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