Some people think that cultural traditions are destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe that this is the only way to save such traditions in the world today. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is undeniable the fact that cultural traditions attract people from all over the world. It's useful to increase the economy of any nation. Some proportion of the masses assert that if these places are modified to attract tourists, these places would be in danger
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whereas, others say that these would be dying, if we don't use them for tourism. I shall discuss
this
topic deeply in the forthcoming paragraphs before giving my own option. To embark with, there are many reasons why we should make these places alluring for tourists.
Firstly
, tourism is the backbone of any country's economy. If government allocates
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funds to make these places more attractive and beautiful, not Only authorities, local people
also
can get various benefits.
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when
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
go to any country to visit different places, they spend a huge amount of their money on various amenities
such
as food, shopping and many more due to which local businesses are
also
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Moreover
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get
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a chance
the chance
to spread our traditions and culture to all over the world and get a chance to meet various people from all over the world. So
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it can be said that presentation is very important to attract tourists and some changes are unavoidable. On the flip side, there are some people who reckon that when these places are used as
moneymaking
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money making
attractions, they lose their natural features and sometimes it makes tradition and culture disappear altogether.
However
, in my opinion changes are the law of nature. Culture and tradition are deep rooted and some superficial changes can not be harmful and I believe that if money is not used to maintain the quality of these places
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they will be destroyed. Laconically, it can be said that tourism is very important to improve the life standard of the public, especially, in those developing countries where income resources are not so much
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