physical education should be ommitted from the curriculum. Do you agree?

I disagree with
omitted physical education
an omitted physical education
the omitted physical education
from the curriculum.
, if
subject is omitted, students will concentrate on the other academic subjects. That means they will spend more time on academic subjects and forget about physical training. Maybe some of them will never do the physical exercises. That can lead to obesity and make us lazier.
, most of the students, especially teenagers, enjoin the PE class because they want to have fitting bodies. Many teenagers are not satisfied with their bodies, because of being too fat or too thin, but in fact, the reason is they didn't do any sport!
, students in Vietnam now still have small bodies compared to friends from developed countries in the world.
, if physical education is being cut off the curriculum, how do you think Vietnamese students will be? They will be sick and thin nerds! They will always learn academic subjects and do homework all the time. That can make them stress, sad, fed up because they have to sit in the classroom for too long, and play sports in PE class can bring us energy for life and the
class, so if
subject does not exist, students will be bored and tired of life, like they are not inspired any fire to keep on with their works. For some of the above reasons, I think physical education should still be included in the curriculum. Hey!
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