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in the future the main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment not to shop DO you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, shopping malls have become one of the major recreational spots for shopping and entertainment, especially in cities. More and more people believe that in the future, the main purpose of going to malls will be
entertainment
Suggestion
entertained
, not shopping. But in my opinion, I choose both sides that you can both go shopping and go for shopping in malls. Modern shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 play an important role in offering various products under a single roof ranging from smallest to largest or
also
 from the cheapest to the most expensive ones. They sell lots of smartest equipment and gadgets, clothes, decorations, all types of fruits, beauty products, and many other things. And especially, you can get advice directly from the staff here. If you are the
shopaholic
Suggestion
Shopaholic
, don't worry about that because you can easily get loyalty cards which can help you get more coupons for the
next
 purchase. Or if you and your friends want to watch movies in the
theater
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
 and
then
 go to the
coffee but
Accept comma addition
coffee, but
 don's want to go far, shopping complexes can meet the demand.
Besides
 the movie
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatre
 and the coffee shops, there are a lot of places for entertaining like restaurants, food court,
kid's
Suggestion
kids'
 corners and much more than that. These malls are considered as a place to connect people. To conclude, I believe that shopping malls will always be great places for shopping and entertainment. And I strongly feel that they will improve more and more than now to serve other essential requirements in human's life.
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