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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online ?

#people #individuals #companies
Nowadays it can be seen that
number
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the number
a number
 of people who prefer buying online are increasing
.
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.
there
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There
 are many
advantages but
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advantages, but
also
 many
disadvantage
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disadvantages
 too On one hand
,
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,
instead
 of taking a car going to the shop
,
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,
going around to find the goods
,
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,
you just need to open the internet
,
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,
order goods you want and pay on the internet.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 that online shopping will save your time a lot.
other
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Other
 companies
also
 can discount for
you only
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you, only
 you buy online.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 it’s
also
 save your money
On the other hand
,
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,
peoplewho
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people who
 buy online won’t know about the
quanlity
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
quality
quantity
 of the items until they receive and open it.
before
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Before
,
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,
there are many accident about sending faulty products or poor
quanlity
an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone
quality
 to the customers.
some
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Some
 shop
do
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does
 it by deliberately so their customers can’t
refund but
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refund, but
 some store so
this
 by accident so they can refund it for
few days
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a few days
. In conclusion
,
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,
online shopping has advantages and
also
 disadvantages
.
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.
it
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It
 depends on your opinion if you
buying
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are buying
buy
 online.
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