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A lot of companies and organisations require employees to wear uniforms. Which kind of jobs are uniforms suitable for? Are there any disadvantages to wearking a uniform to work?

#companies #organisations #employees #uniforms #jobs #uniform #work
Companies and organisations
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their employees, to wear
uniform
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the uniform
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 of their company, which is the symbol of identity. To what extent, it is important for employer and employee, is a most debatable topic around the world.
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 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages,
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 lead to a logical conclusion. First of all, the
uniform
 is a code and everyone feels equal and comfortable in the dress
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 leads to
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 situation in the company. Dress prescribes
uniform
 at work and more formal to look at, in
this
 way clients will treat them with more respect. There are many jobs where
uniform
 is very necessary and present their country's symbol of identity,
for example
, national forces Army, Navy,
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 forces. On the other side of the argument, there are some disadvantages. First of all, it is very difficult for employees to wear the same dress every day and each one gets
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 from it
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want
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 to try something new to feel fresh,
this
 feeling affects their performance at work.
Secondly
, someone may have
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 allergy
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 some kind
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 clothing material so they have to wear it everyday ultimately he or she
work
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 partially hurt which will lead to cuts in production
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, some people have
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from
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 synthetic material most of the dresses are made from that type of cloth. In conclusion, we can say that
uniform
 is necessary in some trade and national force, jobs, but to some
extant
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 wearing
uniform
also
 have disadvantages in some sectors. It should depend on the job requirements and the situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate identity
  • professional pride
  • brand reinforcement
  • customer service
  • protective gear
  • hazardous work environments
  • individuality
  • ill-fitting
  • rigid corporate culture
  • employee dissatisfaction
  • personal freedom
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