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Many people believe that film is a less important art than other forms such as literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people argue that the
art
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 of making films should be regarded as less important compared to other forms of
art
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, namely
literature
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 and painting. From my perspective, every form of
art
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 has its unique features and incomparable to others.
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Thus I
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Thus, I
 would like to believe films are not of secondary importance. On the one hand,
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 does not have any distinctive characteristics to measure it, or compare one form of it to another. So it makes nearly impossible to make judgements and put
literature
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 or painting superior to film-shooting.
On the other hand
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, each of these 3 concepts uses different elements to influence audiences. With the
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- it is a language, with films- visual and auditory cues as well as with painting only visual signs.
This
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, in turn, again proves the statement about the impossibility of comparing one form of
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 to another, as they use different elements and are distinctive. The other point is that these branches of
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 are closely related to each other.
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, the building blocks of
literature
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 are words, for painting -the images, whereas film is in itself a combination of linguistic and visual elements, or the point between the two above.
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, it would not be reasonable to look up on the
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 and neglects films, as the two are inseparable parts of the whole concept of
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. To conclude, the fact that all of the three concepts use different elements and are tightly clashed with each other makes it impossible to compare them.
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, every of them is unique on its own and should be regarded equally, or based on personal preferences.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aesthetic
  • artistic expression
  • cultural significance
  • historical context
  • impactful
  • literary works
  • masterpiece
  • medium (e.g., medium of film)
  • narrative techniques
  • painting styles
  • pedagogical
  • perception
  • profound
  • technological advancement
  • visual storytelling
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