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Some people say that children should stay in school until the age of 18. Others suggest that educating children until the age of 14 is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The appropriate
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 to leave school
life
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 has been a great matter of debate for
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some time
 now. Parents are in dilemma as to when
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 should they take their children out of school- at 18 or 14.In
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 essay we will discuss both the views of debate and I will tell why I think the
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 one is a better option. Almost every year after high school (
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age
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 14)
parents
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Parents
 start to think whether they should continue their
child
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's studies or should they drop them.Indeed,
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may
the month following April and preceding June
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 be a good idea as the
child
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 has learnt the basic knowledge to survive.He or she can bow take any standard job and earn a simple living.People who prefer basic
life
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 tend to spend less on their
child
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's
education
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 as they think earning a livelihood early in
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 will make them independent and
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 they will be a help for the betterment of the family.
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 is mostly the case with the middle class and joint families who have less earning and more mouths to feed.For them backing out from school at the
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 of 14 is a good
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idea, but
 they can lose out on some big opportunities in
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 due to lack of proper
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.
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well
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
Well
 to do families or people who want to achieve greater heights in
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 tend to opt for higher
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 and degrees. These students and their guardians have a higher aim in their do to list. As it's a well known fact that degrees are essential to take up reputed and high level jobs in
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 world
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children happily accept the offer of higher
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 and colleges. In my opinion
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the debate is clearly won by people who think children should study up to the
age
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 of 18 and above. Higher
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 not only benefits the
child
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 and family, but
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 plays a vital role in the progress of society and in turn contributes to the economy of the country.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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