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If a product is good or it meets people will buy it. So, advertisement is unnecessary and no more than entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#product #people #advertisement #entertainment
In the
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
modem
 world,
a
Suggestion
an
advertisement
 is very important to sell the product because these days, most of people are exposed to tv, computer or phone. So I believe that
a
Suggestion
an
advertisement
 is necessary
firmly
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firmly, although
although
 a product is very nice and there are some people who will buy. In
this
 essay, I will suggest about the reasons that the companies have to advertise their products.
First
 of all, the main reason that they need to make
a
Suggestion
an
advertisement
 about their items is because their items can be exposed to the people’s life. It will make more people know about them and introduce many benefits which people didn’t know previously.
Hence
, more people will purchase them than when there is no
advertisement
.
Secondly
, it can build up the trust of the
company
. If the products are very
useful
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usefully
 and good
to
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for
 our society, the
company
 will be able to make their trust to people. And
this
 situation
can leads
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can lead
 to the consumption of
people
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the people
.
For example
, people buy the stuff of the
company
 that has higher trust. In conclusion, it might be stated that the effects of the
advertisement
 are huge
to
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for
 us,
therefore
Accept comma addition
therefore, although
although
a
Suggestion
an
 item is nice and there are some consumers, the
company
 has to make advertisements about their products.
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