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Many people these days change career throughout their working life. What are the main reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development for them personally and for the society as a whole?

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It is well-known a fact that the trend of changing
task
 has been become by people. Many individuals are alternating career throughout their working life. There are many reasons. I deem that it is a positive growth in order to the society and people. Despite of
this
 having some negative impacts. Which I would like to explain in the following paragraphs. Since the
task
 of employees becomes a major part of earning the
money
, they tend to choose another job, which is different from their own
task
. Earning
money
 by individuals has reached at the top.
For example
, people know very well how can they able to earn a higher level of wages. People are very busy in their daily routine. They have no time to spend with others. Because they want to earn lots of
money
. Without the well-paid jobs, they cannot able to achieve. Owing to
this
, they have to change their work. It is a positive development in order to people and community.
Firstly
, they can obtain different types of knowledge from their changing tasks.
For instance
, when a person is developing their
task
. He or she got to deal with many problems at that time. They do not earn
money
. When they vary their
task
. And they do other jobs. They have to know about company experience. To conclude, even though earning
money
 from the people have become a necessity, but it is very necessary for individuals those people who want to earn a lot of
money
 I think I should start
this
 job, which they are doing.
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