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Some people consider price as the most important thing to consider when buying a product (such as a cell phone) or a service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that the most important thing to consider before purchasing products or services is
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e the others do not think so. In my opinion, the cost is not the only thing to consider because there are many other aspects
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 as much as important
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quality
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 or utility. It is clear that people usually give attention to the expense of a
product
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 or
service
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 as a mobile phone or medical facility as they think that buying over-priced products is a wasteful
money
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. In fact, people have to spend hours working in offices in order to earn their monthly income, so they do not want to spend it on purchasing a
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 with expensive
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 that goes beyond their financial capabilities.
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, they consider the
price
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 of goods a
service
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 as the foremost factor in the decision.
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, some believe that the
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's
quality
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 and utilities are
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 critical deciding factors as the
price
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. Regarding
quality
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, people always want to use a good
product
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 or
service
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, especially when they spend amoun
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the amount
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amounts
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 on it.
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, people prefer to purchase any medical facility or mobile phone with superior features and benefits.
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, products or services' utility is
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 an essential element before purchasing because it is sure that customers will never waste
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 on buying a
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 that has no utility for them. In conclusion, before purchasing something, customers should consider many factors of the
product
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 or
service
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 as
price
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,
quality
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 and necessity, and
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 decide to buy to avoid wasting
money
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • prioritize
  • manage finances
  • high quality
  • affordable
  • effective
  • durable
  • essential services
  • efficacy
  • compromise one's health
  • long-term savings
  • durability
  • efficiency
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