Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Poor countries continue to face poverty even after financial assistance is offered by the wealthier nations.

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instead

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of lending money, a poor

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must be supported in other ways.

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, I disagree with the statement as I believe that both financial help and different option

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as setting up of industry is necessary to grow. For a poor

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, financial support is beneficial as it becomes the support system for the government to

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operate in the country

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. Many governmental schemes run

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the money lent by rich countries. To exemplify, in Kenya, a majority of the population lives with the scarcity of fresh drinking

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and are prone to

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water-borne

transported by water

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diseases because of consuming adulterated

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, government officials can set up

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treatment plants on a large scale to provide safe drinking

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by collaborating with foreign nations. Without which, the natives will continue to die. All in all, an excessive amount is required in

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a project which is not possible for a poor nation to self-finance. Taking other ways into consideration, an effective method to aback a needful

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is the setting up of industries. Generally, unemployment is high and people do not get any work to sustain their livelihood and poverty shoots up. So, if a big manufacturing firm built its plant in a penurious

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, they can access abundant

laborers

someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor

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at reasonable wages.

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, people will get employment and they can elevate their standard of living. For illustration, in the early 19th century, poverty was prevailing in

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China, but

with the advent of industrialization, a large number of people get employment and China’s economy boosted up.

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other

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brings a fruitful result for a needy nation. To conclude, I can say that financial aid strengthens the governance, leading to the betterment of people.

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, exploring a variety of ways to assist a poor nation is an empowering step.

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, both money donation and other kinds of support are equally important for development.

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Topic Vocabulary:

poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
technical assistance
expertise
infrastructure
education
fair trade
trade barriers
sustainable development
environmental conservation

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