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The mentioned table illustrates the UN statistics regarding social and economic parameters for 4 nations in the year 1994. The data
is represented
Suggestion
are represented
 in numerical form. Overall, Japan had the most per capita annual income as well as life expectancy at birth; Canada consumed the most daily calories per person; the maximum Adult literacy rate was shared equally between Japan and Canada.
Conversely
, Zaire scored the least in all the 4 indicators.
Firstly
, mentioning about per capita yearly salary, Japan enjoyed well over $15k, Canada with just over $11k, while Peru and Zaire witnessed a mere $160 and $130 income respectively.
Secondly
, the Life expectancy at birth was highest in Japan (78 years), followed by Canada with 76, and Zaire possessed the minimum (under half-century expectancy).
Moreover
, the mean Daily calorie supply was a staggering 3326
cal
fossil fuel consisting of carbonized vegetable matter deposited in the Carboniferous period
coal
col
call
 in Canada, but a poor 1749
cal
Suggestion
Cal
call
coal
 was observed in Zaire.
Lastly
, Japan and Canada had nearly 100% adult literacy rate, which was two-
third
 in Peru, and an astonishing one-
third
 in Zaire.
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